口气还真不小。高手巩固经验....
我点评一下。
An old man is with the god（god 之前不能加The） in the heaven. That old man is my grangpa（拼写错误）. He is not with me anymore. I miss him very much. But, do you know? （but后面不能加逗号） I can see him at night in the sky. Beacause（拼写错误，because.） he told me that he is going to be the brightist(brightest) star to me(to me夹在这里别扭) in the sky.
Every night, I will（will可省。） go to the window, finding （时态错了）the star that belongs to my grandpa. But,(不能加逗号) there is no such thing as the brightist star in the sky. Every single star is all（不能加all,因为有every.语病。） very bright, they are shining（拼写错误。shinning）. Anyway(anyways), grandpa’s star is in my mind. The warmest place and the deapist(拼写。deepist) place.
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实在比较一般。天外有天人外有人。强中自有强中手，莫在人前满自夸。
