十三来也！
其实你英语不错！比那些不懂却滥用词的人强多了。但是有时会犯时态的小毛病。我改了一下。
Do you like animals? Do you want to have a pet? Yes! I think(这里bet比think更强烈，更地道一些) you will like a pet. The pet(the去掉。改为Pets can be. Is去掉。) is people’s good company. My pet store have（改为store sells “有什么”绝不能用have。） many different pets in Tom’s pet store (前面是my pet store,主语。与后面的主语in tom’s pet store重复。二者取一。). They are cute and unusual. And my pet store have（sells） cats, dogs, goldfish, rabbits and hamsters. If you buy it (改为If you make a purchase更地道。). You will have a good pet and good friends （改为as your friend）. They are easy to take gore(care) of. They are beautiful and friends (friendly). If your child feel(feels) lonely(,) you should buy a pet for your child (your child改为him/her 前面提过了，代指即可。). 　
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在一行结束，单词没写完的时候要加连词符

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因为我看了但是不知道有没有语法错误……所以还是不要评了……。
留给十三。^-^