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(访客)(来自 138.19.54.*)于 2021-4-26 18:14:44   
完全不知道你寫甚麼
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JOHN940808(来自 121.34.196.*)于 2007-5-6 10:25:00   
My是"我"的所有格,意思是"我的".一个句子不可以有两个动词,像:They are give me something应该是They　give me something
你应该多多了解语法知识．
JOHN940808(来自 121.34.196.*)于 2007-5-6 10:21:00   
不过,我觉得如果用过去式会更好:
My birthday is on October 5th.My mother bought a birthday cake for me.
There were some red words"Happy birthday"above the cake.I invited two friend to came to my Birthday Party.
They were Qin Yinting and Lin Miaoping.They gave me some presents.I was very happy.
(最后一句我实在是看不懂你想说什么！错的太严重！！)
JOHN940808(来自 121.34.196.*)于 2007-5-6 10:13:00   
5.My invite two friend应该是I invite two friend to come to my Birthday Party.
6.They’re get my present.应该是They give me some presents.
7.My very happy.应该是I am very happy.
8.最后一句我实在是看不懂你想说什么！错的太严重！！
JOHN940808(来自 121.34.196.*)于 2007-5-6 10:06:00   
文章里有很多的错误,不过,相对于一年级的学生而言,还是很不错了!不过,我还是希望作者可以改过来.
1.My birthday is October 5th.应该是My birthday is on October 5th.
2.My mother is buy one birthday cake.应该是My mother buy a birthday cake.
3.cake on use red pencil write HAPPY BIRTHDAY!应该是There are some red words"Happy birthday"above the cake.
JOHN940808(来自 121.34.180.*)于 2007-4-30 12:46:00   
"My birthday is October 5th."should be"My birthday is in October 5th.
"My mother is buy one birthday cake"should be"My mother buy a birthday cake"so on
JOHN940808(来自 121.34.180.*)于 2007-4-30 12:42:00   
There are lots of mistake on it, hope the writer can change it!
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