Dear Paul, I have a good friend in China.His name is Lin Tao.He is 15years old.His favorite hobby are playing basketball,swimming and so on.But he doesn't like to play Ping-Pong ball.His birthday is on January 16th.He likes eating chicken when his birthday came from.And I think he is healthy very much.Because fruites and vegetables are good for him.He doesn't like to eat ice-cream afterlunch.His favorite subject is English,because he thinks it's interesting.These are his information. If you want to make friends with him.You can call his telephone number is 0797-365421. So much about my friend,Lin Tao.Do you like him? Yours, Bill
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Dear Paul,
I want to introduce you my best friend. His name is Lin Tao who is 15 years old. He likes playing basketball, swimming and so on. But he doesn't like to play Ping-Pong. His birthday is on January 16th. He likes eating chicken, fruit and vegetables. So he is very healthy. He doesn't like to eat ice cream. His favorite subject is English, because he thinks it's interesting. Do you want to make friends with him? You can write to let me know and we can play together next time. Yours,
Bill
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